Okay, so as per your wishes I'll rip it apart as much as I can, but first lets get the stuff I want to gush over out of the way:
I love art deco and I love your art. I really dig the noir, the themes, the tone, the world building - it is all done very well.
Now for some (hopefully) constructive criticism!
Lettering
@keii4ii mentioned it in the comments, but there is a lot of difficulty with the speech bubbles. I had to read it twice before I understood what I was looking at. I'm still learning tons when it comes to lettering but I'll try to give you what suggestions I can.
So it seems like you wrote the dialogue yourself, and while your writing would definitely be very good and legible at a greater size with less words per balloon, here it is very difficult to decipher. Also keep in mind, many people use the mobile app. If you want to go for the handwritten look, I would suggest looking for a font online. Visual consistency would keep things easier to read.
Also, consider your use of multiple balloon dialogues in terms of the content of what is being said. Here it looks like you ran of room so you put another balloon in: "And once" is kind of stuck between two balloons.
As an example of how to go about dividing up your balloons, in this same panel I would place "ain't that right?" in a separate balloon because she is changing who she is talking to.
Also, you should even take into consideration how you break up individual lines in a dialogue.
Also in the next panel, "c'mon Dia, I was just yankin your tail" should be a little higher, otherwise the bubble order is a bit ambiguous. I read the top one first.
Finally, often letterers put emphasis on proper nouns the first time they are used to show that they are important. This is because many comic fonts are always capitalized! For example, Haven Rocks (and perhaps even the first time a character calls it just "The Rocks"), Port Nova, and Mina Song should all be bold. If something like "the wall", mentioned in the broadcast, is not exactly a proper noun but still important to know about, perhaps emphasize it in a different way. Italics maybe. You want to point the reader's attention to important things just like how in composition you want to direct the viewer's eyes toward a focal point. If you look back at this paragraph you'll notice I put one of your proper nouns in bold. See the difference?
Writing
Spelling mistakes!!! Grammar mistakes!!! Always check for these!
Also, your use of language can be a bit unclear at times, especially during that opening broadcast. I would suggest having someone take a look at your script beforehand. This is especially important because in comics you really need to learn how to trim the fat for the sake of space. Nobody talks in Buffy-esque or iZombic one-liners in real life (wouldn't it be great if they did?) but they often do in comics, because the language has to be crisp and clear.
A lot of your writing is too verbose and it effects reading.
"OUR EFFORTS AND LABOUR INTO THE CAPITAL HAS
CREATED NOTHING SHORT OF A MIRACLE"
vs
"OUR NEW CAPITAL IS NOTHING SHORT OF A MIRACLE."
Some of your language is a bit unnecessarily odd like "past panderers". I'm taking this to refer to people nostalgic for the old regime but "panderer" doesn't work to well. I understand that you tried to use a lot of alliteration here but lines like "REVEL IN THE JOYOUS REVELATION..." miss the mark. Be precise about what you mean when you use words. Revelation has a lot of meanings attached to it that make it an uncomfortable fit here. I would write that line like this:
"REJOICE, VICTORY IS AT HAND - SO LONG AS YOUR DEVOTION TO THE CAUSE IS UNMITIGATED."
The character is meant to be gushing over this regime, but show that using word choice, not word quantity. I italicized the last part to make it more ominous. Even how you present your writing can convey meaning.
There's a lot more I could go into but I need to finish my own page tonight haha.
Misc
All of your page widths appear different. I'm not sure if it's on purpose but it seems odd.
Final Thoughts
The story seems very deep, and once you get the technical stuff down, I'm super excited to see where this goes. Subscribed.
Here's my comic, Knights, for the next viewer =]